SAT寫(xiě)作時(shí)間為25分鐘，要求就作文命題中的一對對立論點(diǎn)闡述自己的觀(guān)點(diǎn)，無(wú)字數限制。深圳啟德教育為大家整理了一篇SAT寫(xiě)作范文，這篇獲得高分的SAT寫(xiě)作考試范文的主要是關(guān)于人際關(guān)系的，大家可以在備考自己的SAT寫(xiě)作考試的時(shí)候根據自己的實(shí)際情況，進(jìn)行適當的準備和借鑒，以下就是關(guān)于人際關(guān)系的SAT作文范文。 ? 　　What are your opinions about the idea that people make barriers to hide from the outside world? 　　你對人們設置屏障以躲避外部世界的想法持什么樣的觀(guān)點(diǎn)？ ? 　　The concept of karma is that lies and misdeeds eventually come back to hurt oneself in the end. I believe that constructed barriers designed to mask a person from the world will ultimately fail and reverberate with negative consequences on the original actor. This is shown in the novels Fight Club and A Farewell to Arms. 　　In Fight Club, acts of violence and terrorism enacted by underground, covert organizations calling themselves “fight clubs” escalate in intensity and danger, until a man is finally killed. The unnamed main character/narrator was a friend of the dead man, who claimed to be on a “mission” assigned by their anti-corporation leader, Tyler Durden. In a shocking twist of events, the narrator discovers that the anarcho-primitivist Tyler is actually his own subconscious alter-ego, who emerges as soon as the narrator falls asleep. This dangerous psychotic arose from the main character's repression of his love for a woman, thus constructing a barrier between his desires and the world. The barrier spawned a madman, intent on destroying civilization as we know it and returning humanity to a hunter-gatherer society. In such a case, the formation of a barrier separating the self from the world was a dangerous and enormously deleterious action. In Hemingway's A Farewell to Arms, the English lady Catherine Barkley seems to fall in love with Frederick Henry, but a closer reading of the novel reveals her desire is merely masking her neediness and insecurity after losing her first lover to war. Catherine is described as “a little crazy” when Henry meets her; she does not have one to love; she is bereaved and near mad. She constructs affection for Fred as a barrier to block out her insecurities. 　　The dangerous impacts of this construction is shown at the end of the novel: as she lies on the bed, she mutters that her love for Frederick has broken her. She dies without letting her true unconscious surface, and has psychological clashes due to her lover. 　　In both Fight Club and A Farewell to Arms, barriers constructed by certain characters, to hide from the world certain parts of themselves, fall back against them in harmful ways. Without a true, candid resolution to one's problems, an honest appraisal through “coming clean, ” the maxim that “what goes around, comes around” fits nicely: the self-constructed barrier may collapse in on its creator.? ? 　　深圳啟德教育也為大家準備了關(guān)于人際關(guān)系的SAT作文范文的翻譯，幫助大家更好的理解吸收，希望大家取長(cháng)補短，更輕松的攻克SAT寫(xiě)作。 ? 　　因果報應的觀(guān)點(diǎn)認為撒謊和為惡會(huì )回過(guò)頭來(lái)終傷害到自己。我相信設置屏障以躲避外部世界終會(huì )失敗，并必然給始作俑者帶來(lái)負面后果。小說(shuō)《戰斗俱樂(lè )部》和《永別了，武器》中便有這樣的例子。 ? 　　在《戰斗俱樂(lè )部》中，自稱(chēng)“戰斗俱樂(lè )部”的地下組織制定了一系列暴力和恐怖游戲，其暴力程度和危險性逐漸升級，直到有人終被殺死。不*的主角，即故事的敘述者，是那位死者的朋友，據稱(chēng)他擔負著(zhù)反*組織頭目泰勒·德登所指派的“使命”。后來(lái)，故事發(fā)生了一次驚人的轉折，故事的敘述者發(fā)現，這個(gè)無(wú)*的原始主義者泰勒其實(shí)是他自己潛意識的化身，每當他睡覺(jué)的時(shí)候泰勒便出現。這個(gè)危險的精神疾患源自他對一位女性的愛(ài)的壓制，因此他在自己的欲望與外部世界之間筑起了一道屏障。這道屏障孕育出了一個(gè)瘋子，他打算毀滅我們現有的文明，將人類(lèi)帶回到原始社會(huì )。在這個(gè)例子里，建造一道將自己與世界隔離開(kāi)來(lái)的屏障是一種非常危險的行為。 ? 　　在海明威的小說(shuō)《永別了，武器》里，英國女子凱瑟琳·巴克利似乎與弗雷德里克·亨利墜入愛(ài)河，然而細讀后卻發(fā)現，小說(shuō)透露出她想要的只不過(guò)是掩飾她的需求和在戰爭中失去*個(gè)愛(ài)人后的不安全感。當亨利遇見(jiàn)凱瑟琳時(shí)，書(shū)中描述她“有一些神經(jīng)質(zhì)”；她還未找到可以寄托愛(ài)情的人；失去愛(ài)人幾乎讓她發(fā)瘋。她對弗雷德里克產(chǎn)生感情就好比設置一道屏障以阻擋她的不安全感。 ? 　　這樣做的危險在小說(shuō)的結尾顯現出來(lái)：當她躺在床上的時(shí)候，她喃喃自語(yǔ)，稱(chēng)她對弗雷德里克的愛(ài)毀了自己。她直到死都沒(méi)有暴露自己真實(shí)存在的潛意識，卻因愛(ài)人產(chǎn)生了心理上的抵觸。 ? 　　在《戰斗俱樂(lè )部》和《永別了，武器》兩部小說(shuō)中，人們構筑屏障來(lái)掩蓋自己的某些方面，結果卻深受其害。對一個(gè)人遇到的麻煩，如果不用一種現實(shí)的、坦率的方法來(lái)解決，即通過(guò)“全盤(pán)招供”的方式作出誠實(shí)的評估的話(huà)，那么就只會(huì )自食其果：自己建造的屏障后會(huì )倒塌下來(lái)砸傷它的建造者。 ? 　　以上就是關(guān)于人際關(guān)系的SAT作文范文，深圳啟德教育邀您一起來(lái)看看關(guān)于本篇文章考官的評價(jià)吧。 ? 　　[Grade: 6/6]Instruction's Comments： 　　Instruction's Comments：Once again you've turned in an essay that surely rises above most of the others that a typical standardized test essay grader is likely to see. I give this one a 5/6 because, while it is probable that a grader would give it a 6, it is not as strong as some of the other essays you've turned in; hence the “5. ” I think it's worth mentioning again what I mean by ?“strong, ” or what I mean when I say that you've written a good essay. There's only one goal when sitting for the standardized test essay, and that is to get the highest score possible. You've demonstrated that you are capable of writing what would be considered a “6” essay. Your goal should be to write the kind of essay that leaves no doubt in the grader's mind that it deserves anything less. 　　A lopsided essay, or one in which one example is clearly better than another, could leave a grader with doubt. In the above essay, your Fight Club example is great. Your diction is sophisticated, you give great details, and you very neatly tie the example back to your thesis （which, in turn, is very much on topic） . （One thing: it would have been nice if you'd mentioned the author's name-although my guess is that you weren't sure on the spelling of “Palahniuk, ” -which I admit I had to double check myself-but better to misspell the name than not give it at all. ） . 　　But your second example, while strong, is not as well developed as the first （I think you'd agree） . This fact alone, no matter how good the rest of the essay, will make the grader think twice about giving you a 6. Now it may be that your essay on the whole is so good that, despite the presence of a clearly weaker example, it still deserves a 6 （which I believe is true of this paper） , but some other graders may not think so. ? 　　I guess my whole point is that you should always think of your essay from the grader's point of view. He or she has a list of criteria to follow, and you don't want to give any excuse to the grader to give you anything less than the highest score possible. There are a few tense errors and one rough patch where you break from parallel structure, but so long as the grammatical errors are minor it should not make the least bit of difference when it comes to your grade, and so I do not dwell on them here. ? 　　Overall you've done a commendable job and you should be proud of this essay. ? 　　得分：5/6，輔導老師評語(yǔ)： ? 　　你又交上了一篇出色的作文練習，一般標準化考試作文閱卷老師喜歡看到這類(lèi)文章。也許閱卷者會(huì )給滿(mǎn)分，但我只給了5分，因為它沒(méi)有你交上來(lái)的其他一些作文有力。 　　我認為值得再一次解釋什么是我所說(shuō)的“有力”，或者我為什么說(shuō)你的文章寫(xiě)得好。當你坐下來(lái)構思標準化考試的作文時(shí)，你只有一個(gè)目標，那就是盡可能地獲得高分。你已經(jīng)證明你能寫(xiě)出滿(mǎn)分的作文，因此你的目標應該是寫(xiě)那種不會(huì )給閱卷者留下任何疑問(wèn)從而導致扣分的文章。 ? 　　這是一篇有失平衡的作文，即文中一個(gè)論據明顯好于另一個(gè)論據，這一點(diǎn)會(huì )給閱卷者留下疑問(wèn)。在文中，你的《戰斗俱樂(lè )部》的論據非常棒。你的措辭老到，有很好的細節描寫(xiě)，非常巧妙地將論據與論題連在一起（它反過(guò)來(lái)也與主題緊緊相扣。有一點(diǎn)，如果你還能順便提一下作者的名字就更好了。我猜想你當時(shí)沒(méi)有把握拼出作者的名字“Palahniuk”。我承認就連我自己也需要再核實(shí)一下。不過(guò)就算拼錯了也比一點(diǎn)不提要強）。 ? 　　你的第二個(gè)論據雖然也比較有力，但不如*個(gè)展開(kāi)得那么好（我想你會(huì )同意我的觀(guān)點(diǎn)）。 ? 　　單就這一點(diǎn)便會(huì )讓閱卷者猶豫，不知是否給你滿(mǎn)分，雖然文章的其余部分寫(xiě)得很棒?，F在可能的情況是，盡管出現了一個(gè)明顯弱一些的論據，但是因為整篇文章不錯，你仍有可能獲得滿(mǎn)分（我認為對這篇文章來(lái)說(shuō)確實(shí)如此），不過(guò)有些閱卷者不一定會(huì )這么認為。 ? 　　我想我要說(shuō)的是：你應當始終從閱卷老的角度來(lái)思考你的文章。閱卷者遵循一套閱卷的標準，你不該給他們任何扣分的理由。 ? 　　文中有幾個(gè)時(shí)態(tài)上的錯誤和一處破壞文章平行結構后進(jìn)行的粗糙補救。但是，因為語(yǔ)法錯誤并不重要，它對你的成績(jì)幾乎沒(méi)有什么影響，所以我不在這里贅述。 ? 　　總之，你做得不錯，值得驕傲。 ? 　　以上就是關(guān)于人際關(guān)系的SAT作文范文的翻譯，深圳啟德教育小編提醒您SAT寫(xiě)作考試的時(shí)間短，但是要求卻很?chē)?，大家在備考SAT寫(xiě)作考試的時(shí)候，大家可以根據自己的實(shí)際情況，對范文的語(yǔ)言應用和例子的選擇進(jìn)行不同程度的準備，以便豐富自己的備考內容，對考試有更加全面的應對。 ?